Curse you, premchaia! You just had to mention that the verbs in the double-flashback in chapter 2 of my novel (that is, the part where the first-person narrator is in a scene that is a flashback, and then in that scene thinks back on events that had happened even earlier) were off and were confusing as a result, and of course I have to fix it because that's my job as an author and all, but good lord this is hard. Now I have to figure out dependent clauses with the past perfect tense and I'm not 100% sure those are even the right terms for either!
"Every time I had started to calm down, I looked around and saw (deceased character) wasn't there, and then cried again."
Every time I had started to calm down, I had looked around and seen? I would look around and see...?
RARRRGH DOUBLE FLASHBACKS ARE HARD
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